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  1. raunchyandpaunchy says:
    September 29, 2018 at 6:00 pm

    I liked this chapter – short and to the point, with plenty of sardonicism.

    “Thurindur’s a nasty suspicious bastard who suspects my motives.

    Uluwie believes everyone here to be an unprofessional disgrace to soldiery.

    They are probably both right. We don’t get along.”

    This is some gold Cyr commentary.

    The last line was gorgeous too – I liked the turn in mood from mocking to melancholy. A hint at what’s to come, perhaps?

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  2. Syl says:
    September 29, 2018 at 7:03 pm

    When I wrote the first three chapters (and the missing fourth chapter), I originally had the break points in very different places. If you look, you’ll see that the image of the bars is repeated later– it was taken at the same time as the screens with the dragon.

    This ended up being rather short because I wanted to break it there, because otherwise it would be intro’ing into the party scene, which I feel is kind of different.

    I do love coming up with his bitchy little asides. It’s almost as much fun as an Ahtar rant.

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